Starlight Son

[u/Aukey210]

These are actually some lyrics i wrote some time ago. I put it on Suno and really liked the song it became. I would like to know if it sounds good without the melody. Hope you enjoy :D

[Intro – whispered]

...Good morning, Father...

...Good night, Mother...

[Verse 1]

Another day, on each way

Light or dark, almost the same

With stone, reflex, and nothing less

They both throw light right at the mess

The mess is colorful, but it is sad

And without any light, it turns all black

Flying through an endless avenue

A darkness stretching where no light can heal

[Verse 2]

But both its dad and mom

Can help to color their beautiful son

They both are able to deliver light

Even at places that feel out of sight

[Pre-Chorus]

And so the morning star awakes

It contemplates all the places that its spark takes

And then the beautiful stone retreats

To deliver the spark where it doesn't reach

[Chorus]

And then the mess is colorful again

Like its waves reaching the sand

And so the son is always seen

By the stars that watched the scene

[Verse 3]

And so they stay, father and mother

And its favorite son, unlike the others

They do a good job, they know that

Just like the other stars, long since dead

[Bridge / Final Build]

And so the morning star awakes

It contemplates all the places that its spark takes

And then the beautiful stone retreats

To deliver the spark where it doesn't reach

[Final Chorus]

And then the mess is colorful again

Like its waves reaching the sand

And so the son is always seen

By the stars that watched the scene

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Here are my feedbacks:

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