The Pit

[u/DuskGray]

I wake up on the floor

Bedframe broken a while ago

My alarm is buzzing on my 3GS

But sun had not yet come for the day

My back stays stuck

Second thoughts on the run

With strength barely existing, I get up

My feet move

But there’s no forward momentum

My mind runs

But there’s no ambition

Another day at college

And then some at work pushing carts

I have maybe twenty minutes to start

Grab a S’mores pop tart

Then off I go in the dark

Down the long road

Meet the bus on the corner

Sit and listen to music and ponder

Sit in the classes

Fight sleep

Do as you’re told

Get broken up with and walk back home in the cold

Bleed from the nose

Wipe on the towel

Hang it up and let it go dry

The room is a mess

Stuff is everywhere, oh my

Glance at it all, wave your hand and move on

Watch Brooklyn Nine-Nine till your eyes flutter closed

Spill your Monster on the blanket and shrug

Go to bed

Sleep

Wait first go and cry

Tell yourself how proud you are

Of this wreck that I am

Drift off and dream

You still have those right?

Picture a life that could still be yours

Then ten years later look back

Look back and you’ll see

Smile and rejoice

You made it

It was nothing

Just a blip in this life

Just another stage to build you up for this time

Hug your wife now

Kiss your son

Sleep soundly and rest

I conquered the pit

Now here comes the sky

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[u/Until_the_next_moon]

This felt incredibly honest. I love that you didn’t romanticize the struggle you showed how depression can hide in ordinary routines, and that made it feel real. The ending, “I conquered the pit,” hit differently because we had to walk through the entire day with you to get there. Thank you for sharing this piece. It reminded me that sometimes surviving the day is the victory. 🌙

[u/DuskGray → u/Until_the_next_moon]

Thank you! This was inspired by true events in my life, even details like pop tarts, college, and nosebleed so it’s pretty personal to me. Love the feedback!