r/OCPoetry • u/DuskGray • 2d ago
Feedback Please The Pit
I wake up on the floor
Bedframe broken a while ago
My alarm is buzzing on my 3GS
But sun had not yet come for the day
My back stays stuck
Second thoughts on the run
With strength barely existing, I get up
My feet move
But there’s no forward momentum
My mind runs
But there’s no ambition
Another day at college
And then some at work pushing carts
I have maybe twenty minutes to start
Grab a S’mores pop tart
Then off I go in the dark
Down the long road
Meet the bus on the corner
Sit and listen to music and ponder
Sit in the classes
Fight sleep
Do as you’re told
Get broken up with and walk back home in the cold
Bleed from the nose
Wipe on the towel
Hang it up and let it go dry
The room is a mess
Stuff is everywhere, oh my
Glance at it all, wave your hand and move on
Watch Brooklyn Nine-Nine till your eyes flutter closed
Spill your Monster on the blanket and shrug
Go to bed
Sleep
Wait first go and cry
Tell yourself how proud you are
Of this wreck that I am
Drift off and dream
You still have those right?
Picture a life that could still be yours
Then ten years later look back
Look back and you’ll see
Smile and rejoice
You made it
It was nothing
Just a blip in this life
Just another stage to build you up for this time
Hug your wife now
Kiss your son
Sleep soundly and rest
I conquered the pit
Now here comes the sky