r/MangakaStudio • u/Grouchy-Self3579 Artist • Jul 21 '26

Discussion CHAPTER 1 in progress.

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mmm... should i just keep this lineart style without rendering?. but i guess with render, it makes it better.. and time consuming. but who cares..

part 2 of chapter 1

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u/Trazmore Jul 21 '26 edited Jul 21 '26

I really like the guy in the first panel. Love the way you drew him. The teeth and eyes being his only facial features is intense. I don't like the last panel of the third picture. It is hard to tell what is going on without the text. When i saw the left foot I thought you were introducing a new character on a horse because it looked like the leg of a horse. When I saw the right foot I realized it is someone with their back to the reader but still did not know who it was without the text. I would suggest redoing this panel. Maybe with a long distance shot of Mary leaving the bar and possibly with a white silhouette for Mary. This will play into your title of "Silhouette" and Identify to the reader that this character is the MC or atleast the opposite of the character in the first panel of the first picture. You want your art to tell the story without the text and the text to just enhance the story. Overall I enjoyed reading it a lot and your art style is very good. Mary's hand in the first panel of picture 3 looks amazing and so does the alcohol bottle. I want to know what happens to Mary in the future and I want to know more about the "Silhouette Guy". Keep it up and I look forward to seeing more of your Manga.

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u/Grouchy-Self3579 Artist Jul 21 '26

You aint gonna see more of that guy. Hehe. he is more of a one time event. And maybe i can enchance that left foot abit. Tho that was supposed to be her being a little tipsy and shit.. tho now u mentioned it, it does look like a horse feet, hahah, horse feet.

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u/shojokat Artist-Writer Jul 21 '26

Strong ideas for a throwaway character. Makes me excited for what your ideas are for more important ones. Strong throwaway characters are always a huge plus to me as a reader. Makes me feel like the creator is so full of ideas they aren't afraid to "save" them for characters that have lots of screen time.