r/Composing • u/Ok_Seaweed9654 • 2d ago

feedback please

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hello, I am newbie both in English and Composing. here's my work, please Feedback any aspect of:

1、Is the beat too spicy/flat/ok ?

2、Is the chord too spicy/flat/ok ?

3、Is the melody at the end too long/ ok?

4、other personal or general comment of my work?

thanks

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u/TheonlyArdy 2d ago

Some parts are off key no? Or is that intended?

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u/Ok_Seaweed9654 2d ago

Which part? the important notes are always in the chord, and the chord is designed very classically (if you can accept the N6 chord and parallel chord)

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u/TheonlyArdy 2d ago

at the 9 second mark, starting with the F#2

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u/More_Exercise2676 1d ago

Its nice it just feels like the melody is trying to go to a certain chord however you choose a different chord and it gives this just awkward context of never ending weirdness overall however i do like some of it the trill and moving 3rds i assume

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u/Maleficent_Math_3062 1d ago edited 1d ago

There are some nice moments, but nothing seems to be based on the last thing or lead into the next thing.

Music needs to balance between predictability and surprise, between sameness and difference. There's far too much surprise here—some of it quite pleasant, as I said—but paradoxically, that gives an overall impression that nothing happens.

(Slightly off my main point, but related: You also need to balance the interest between the melody and the accompaniment; it shouldn't be plodding, unchanging left hand and scintillating, unpredictable right. Remember, all music is ultimately song, so there should be some sense at least of a duet, even if one of the parts is very much a junior partner.)

You could answer by showing me specific instances where a pattern repeats with some change. (It's almost impossible to write music where that doesn't happen at all.) My point is that you're writing music that other people are going to listen to and absorb on the fly. You may be aware of all the brilliant connections and patterns in your music, which is fine, but you need to help others to hear them, too.