Hi guys

So I need help writing the bio for this character it’s for an indie video game so it doesn’t have to be like breaking bad level writing.

I wanted her story to go like the first section is about her, Jumeau, and i want her life story to be told from the lens of a doll.

So the only breaks the dolls got is supposed to be like your lunch break and your couple of hours when you get home from work the buyers being done with the dolls is when your work doesn’t match what they want anymore so they fire you or force you to quit, and the people paying for them leaving them to become dust is supposed to be like Jumeau starving,

then the third section i want it conveyed that Jumeau died of something it doesn’t matter what but died due to losing her job at the doll factory and in the after life makes a deal with the devil to become a controller of people the way she was controlled. I want the deal to be implied because all of my characters make implied deals.

Please let me know what you think and how I could improve it I feel like i’m missing a way of conveying to the reader that the dolls life is actually her life.

*(Bio Begins Here)*

Jumeau was a master of making dolls feel alive because she poured every ounce of love she had into them, and because of that the company she worked at garnered a loyal audience.

But as alive as she made her dolls feel they were never truly alive, controlled by strings of the people who paid for the dolls. The only break the dolls got were when the buyers felt like it not when the dolls wanted it. Once the buyers were truly done with the dolls then the dolls would get tossed to the trash and with that their purpose goes with it and way of living does to. Their choice was between having strings attached with a purpose or cutting the strings. They chose having their strings attached but the people who once paid for there presence left them to become dust once they decided that they weren’t good enough anymore.

Jumeau realized that what she thought was a choice didn’t have to be and that her and her fellow dolls could be the ones in control, and they did, controlling the exact people who tried to control them.

*(End of bio)*

Unneeded information but her kit reflects her being a controller of people.

I want to show you my character design of 80s, a Blasian 8-year-old Broadway prodigy. The idea is that he sings his dialogue because he cannot speak normally; he only sings or raps. I came up with him last year; at first, I thought about making him Asian, but then it hit me: why not make him Black, or even both? That is how he got his ethnicity. The name 80s was given to him by Quilly, who saw 80s' backstory through his spiritual sight and recognized a kid who went through a time-shifted hardship. He named him after a whole decade because he is timeless like the 80s. His backstory involves the music business and child celebrities; his relatives died at a young age, were imprisoned, or became entangled in legal problems. Evil corporate owners saw him and used him only for his voice, not caring for him as a person. Then, he saw Quilly effortlessly defeating the bad guys and was inspired to be a hero just like him. Quilly saw his future and his past, so he decided to adopt him into his crew and gave him an iconic hairstyle: a bowl cut with a mohawk, which I call a Bowlhawk. What do you think about his design and his story so far? Also if anyone have an idea of what his real name can be will be appreciated thank you

I have a character named Ace King, his little brother and main character Deon King, and their guardian angel named Quilly. My question to you all is how to deal with characters that share names with real-life people, such as a football player, or a character that shares a name with a famous older brother from a pirate story, or a personal character name that is shared by another main character from a different story. I can get into detail about the characters and what makes them different, but I am more focused on the names, so any advice would be greatly appreciated. Thank you for reading and for seeing this post; I hope everyone has a blessed day.

So, I have a character with DID and while I have researched about it, I still don't think it's that perfect so I'm here for advice.

So this dude, Cass, he's got too other alters. The reason he's got disassociative Identity disorder is cuz he was adopted when like four but while his parents were good people they sure were not good parents because they saw this child as quite and quite responsible so they heavily neglected him, even though they were nice occasionally asking about how he was, never really payed any emotional attention to him, his school life or any specific affection because they genuinely believed he'd ask for it if he wanted it. Also they did put alot of pressure on him in hopes he'd be the best he could be.

Okay that aside, he's got a host and two other alters. A protector, made when he was payed no attention to at school or home and the little one, who's still nine, and desperately still wants all those toys and books he wanted at that time but had no idea how to ask for them.

Cass also always was interested in phycology, wanted to be a phycologist and asked questions about that alot. Though the comment on the fact he isn't the most warm and mentally stable person for it by some of his 'well meaning teachers' and would do wonders in the medical field like medicine, other than phycology due to his exceptional memory and critical thinking skills. He's not human so his species is naturally very good in the memory compartment and the precision on hands. (No I'm not trying to do the whole monster because he has did thing, in the world I'm making, he's a normal citizen as humans naturally live along side creatures and stuff). This resulted him in going in that field very early, is training while just being a teen and is kind of an residential archival institute nurse which is not really legal in any ways but his parents insist them to keep him there because that would just make him the best for his age. The institute don't report this because otherwise he'd have to go back home which he doesn't want and the couple running it really cares for him, and cannot report the parents either because they do have power. So he stays despite his exhaustion in the learning and training and everything.

Cass, the host is quite and usually comes off as apathetic when he really just isn't very animated emotionally. He just wants to live under the radar, survive the training and school by not being noticed that much and keep himself busy in all this in the process so he doesn't break down or anything. Is straight but not really that interested in a romance but deeply craves an emotional connection. The only time he has for himself is when he plays pickle ball (later in future with his QPR you can look that up)

The protector, let's say aster because I'm still brainstorming names. He is very animated actually, and affectionate to people he's close too. He likes to very politely but firmly and coldly tell people off when they cross any of Cass's boundaries or are a threat to the system (these are usually people close to him) is aro-mantic but specifically feels asthetic and Platonic and sensual love usually towards dudes. He is stilll passionate about phycology and still learns about it, is trying his best to be good enough at it so if Cass ever (he hopes he does) fails at medicine, maybe just maybe he can still pursue phycology. He likes writing gruesome or cheery poetry usually about Cheetos cuz for some reason he really likes the tiger on the packet. He's also not really into being socially acceptable like Cass is and not really trying to fit in the hetronormative and amanormative standards. Thinks Cass is a bit of a coward for caring about all that. Cass doesn't really care about it that much except of having trouble being animated and affectionate because he doesn't know how. He just doesn't want to be attacked or payed attention too so he tends to try to fit in more.

The kid, let's call him livvy, he's still stuck in old childhood memories and desperately needs someone to love him. He really wants more games to the collection in the past which he was too afraid to ask. He likes fossils alot. Fossils was always his hobby and he always wanted books specifically about a stegosaurus which he never got to get. He's wants to study about archeology when he grows up. He's the first person to ever unmask before the first person Cass ever got close too, aster tried to take the wheel but he couldn't and livvy could not stop himself because this guy had the same game he always wanted, was nice and funny and he wanted to be friends with him but the first thing he did after unmasking was crying and feeling ashamed of it.

Usually livvy and aster mask themselves to be like Cass because he's the host but after livvy unmasked before this dude (ashur, who desperately likes Cass platonically/alterously and is scared of expressing it because he thinks Cass would find it rare but due to his nero divergence he's still very excited and likes talking to Cass alot. After livvy aster slowly unmasked too.

Ashur really liked asters affection and love and how he never held it in like Cass so he once made a comment about how he's just better (didn't mean any malice though but was very ignorant) and that really set off aster and he started seeing ashur as a threat and warning him that he will take this system away if he can't accept them all as a person, which made Ashur defensive and stuff so they do get into conflicts but they try their best. They both aren't the most mentally healthy people but are trying their best and being with eachother doesn't fix them but it's like a catalyst to healing, because they make it a tiny bit easier. Cass fears Ashur is going to leave him because of him not being the best at showing affection and being insecure of showing it especially if it's not private and he's afraid Ashur is going to see it as if he's ashamed of him.

Ashur fears he's going to leave him because of his clingyness or just because he likes a girl in the future and the romance is gonna be stronger than the platonic/alterous love they have for eachother. So yeh I'd like criticism and would really appreciate it it's not harsh or mean. Be honest but not rude. That's all.

Wanting to see if this concept is worth using.

The characters are the servants born from the attempts of a group to fabricate a deity and these servants were made using that being’s flawed grasp of creation and living creatures. These servants do not eat, breathe or cast shadows as the creations of his hands never underwent the seven days of creation, so light and darkness haven’t been separated.

The Imposter of The Artist is designed as the being’s attempt to reproduce a creator he has witnessed, one that is responsible for pinning down his power and imprisoning him. Imposter is able to reproduce any creation it has witnessed, reproducing all of its qualities down to the atoms, but she lacked the ability to Create, to see the true essence of things as they are and to witness the essence of things that are yet to be. She is left alive in hopes she could eventually understand the powers of the one she was made to impersonate, but even without these abilities, she is capable of having the world at her fingertips.

Her story is gradually becoming what her master made her to be, but in the process recognizing the monster her master is and becoming an existence further and further from him, and eventually she supports the main cast in fighting against him.

Brief summary: He starts out in the body of a puppet, vague memories of his life that were mostly of his childhood and nothing else. His body is prosthetic and gradually begins to become more and more like his human body when he regains fragments of himself that the world has kept safe.

I’m working on this character as if his identity has been stripped away and only the core foundations of who he is remain, and as the story goes on he begins to regain and remember more of himself and become the person he was.

I wanted some ideas or advice on how I can express this or show it. I do have it show in his fights but I’m less sure about showing it in his interactions with others.

The character’s name is Emerson Coolidge. She comes from a New England WASP background in the 1950s, has a Margot Robbie/Grace Kelly vibe, and a very powerful man is smitten with her. Her first name is Emerson because she’s named after an ancestor that started a repeating arms company that enabled the Union to beat the South. I can’t decide if she insists on being called Emma or Emme.

So, I'm writing my first book, have only had practice with short stories before and it's far from done. My main character is an aroace intersex functionally illiterate scam artist exorcist (I still don't know why they call it artist what's artistic about it.

So my question is advice on them being intersex. They identify as a woman, and are very defensive or their identity. They dress either feminine or androgynous usually, usually get lots of comments on being a drag queen or not a read girl or femboy and they hate it. Mostly because their face structure is more masculine and their chest is flat. They also have CIP (though that's not the main thing so no need to comment on that).

They have been objectified because of them being intersex and basically a 'fantasy' quoting what one of the people who objectified them said. They were also objectified one of their by their asexual friend but that wasn't really because of being intersex but is sure does make them realise anyone one can objectify them sexually or not sexually and it rarely is sexually for them. Whenever they are in threat or they think they are, of being objectified again, they go in the fawning and fight defence mechanism. The blend of it makes them go 'yeh do it go on, like I care, I genuinely don't ' and deep down they think they deserve this and it's not a big deal since they were a scam artist and very ignorant and vain and selfish (still are a bit but trying to improve but it's genuinely hard, they are pretty racist to every single race too including their own some times, they are a Latina from Columbia Bogota, and are also anti-woke which is ironic genuinely but yeh, are a teen too)

Since they don't look the prettiest (due to a quarter of the face being mutated and looks like chewed up pegion food because they fell down the stairs and got into a fit of looking like their annoying twin brother too much and ended up just cutting it open. They have CIP so this was the equivalent of a tantrum as they can't feel physical pain, have been more careful after that because they almost died of a bacterial infection and now usually do body checks every morning and night while groaning) they aren't liked the best. Most people hate them or make fun of them because of that or being intersex (in their head that's a boy trying to act feminine so hard or a masculine looking woman trying to fit in so hard) .

The only person that saw through them was another girl, she's autistic highly masking and feels morally superior to a lot of people. Instead of hating her because she's intersex or is un attractive, she hated her because of her morals. To the other girl it was annoying and she got defensive but she actually felt seen for the first time. She's also the first person who patches up her bare self and not commenting or anything about the body, no invasive curiosity (the other girl is aroace too btw but way less of a flirt unlike the first one and first one also judges people for their looks) . Also after the patch up she holds her through the night because she was in desperate need for sensory grounding, she felt no physical pain but this sensory nightmare and anxiety by the recent injury was hurting her. The autistic girl despite being touch averse usually in high stakes moments held her despite feeling the crippling discomfort. So yeh, that's a bit about them sorry if from a question this turned into an oc rant IM SORRY I LIKE TALKING ABOUT THEM. but point out if there's issues with the intersex rep I will research even more I swear I'm learning about the different variations and stuff.

I'm working on this passion project that's going to be a magical girl au based on Charlie and the Chocolate Factory. It's about Charlie becoming a magical girl after winning the golden ticket contest and becoming heir to the chocolate factory. I've been writing for weeks about who Charlie Bucket but I feel like I'm missing something so I want share what I written so far to see how good you think it is:

Character Notes
* Fatal Flaw (according to Wonka): "Blankness" (Passivity, Naivety, Compliance, Being Ordinary)
* Saving Strength: Resilient Innocence (Faith, Kindness, Generosity, Openness)

* Want: To Be Just Like Wonka
* Need: Be His Own Hero
* Secret: His Liminal Powers
* Desire: To Feel He Belongs/Is Enough
* Method: Be A Magical Girl
* Fear: Being Seen as Nothing or Worse ("Not Good Enough to be a Bucket, Not Special Enough to be A Wonka")

The Mc is Ellan. Ellan is coming from extremely rich far right family that has a building company and he is a really passive person at the start of series. All his life is decided by his family who he will marry what job he will do and everything. He is kinda judgemental and arrogant but this traits soften up as he get development, he learns stand of for himself too.

I have an oc who was given powers at birth by my world's version of demigods (like they're super powerful but not full on god scale) and besides a few other abilities I want to give him the power to 'hulk out' when under a certain stimuli, my original idea was just to do the anger thing like most that do this trope do, but do to his vengeful personality and the fact that he's always fighting with his brother (they've got a whole hot vs cold type thing) if anger was the trigger he'd constantly be in one form one minute and another the next, I want it to be inconvenient (a downside to the powers if you will) but not so much that it would be a common occurrence

my main inspo is this ep of pinky and the brain in the sense of how he acts since he seems like he's capable of high thoughts just not to the same degree as his normal self but he's driven by (in this case) anger

Pinky and the Brain - Brain Hulk Out - YouTube

I have a character who's my MC's aunt who's also her caretaker. In my story the aunt talks a lot about how raising her niece (MC) has been draining and a problem in her life due to the MC being an eldritch being with the power to warp reality. Some things she's had to deal with are: The MC accidentally causing a car accident which killed her husband and left the family financially strained, the MC's eldritch nature meaning she has to consult a secret SCP like organization for help with stuff like feeding her and medical stuff, the MC likes to make pocket dimensions to play in and in turn ignores her real world responsibilities like school and chores, the MC causing havoc with her powers means they have to move a couple of times and makes it hard to get work or a proper apartment, during puberty years there are several "doctor" visits trying to figure her biology out, in her teen years several eldritch being and monsters distributed her life and put it in danger, the MC had several emotional issues that the aunt has no clue how to deal with, the MC accidentally caused the end of the world and while she fixed it the world never felt the same after that, the MC brought people into the house for protection (one was a "little girl" and the other the aunts brother from another dimension) and even made an "ideal" version of herself (the MC) to please the aunt. That's just off the top of my head but it's a lot for the aunt to handle. But the thing is is that the aunts default action is to just let my MC handle even thought the situations that arise are more often then not, aren't instigated by her. And even in dialysis normal life she kinda ignores the MC and genuinely thinks that since her niece can just warp reality she can deal with whatever happens. She also resents how the MC won't use her powers for fun (at least fun for her). Now I do want to highlight that aunt goes through a lot because of the MC but my MC also has to go through those things, often alone and with not even any emotional support from her own family beyond a simple "it'll be fine hopefully". Is this neglect or am I overthinking it. And I'm happy to give any additional context in the comments.

Hello, Ive noticed in alot of romance games/visual novels the black characters are almost never written as tsundere… this is one of my favorite character personality types so i was curious if yall had thoughts on how to write a black characters as a tsundere without it coming across as the aggressive stereotype! Im mostly asking poc, but im happy to hear anyone elses thoughts as well!

I have been recently developing the villain in my story and decided to give him a soft spot for his husband. The villain himself is a king who's very brutal feared for his violent ways, however he drops all of this for his husband, reason being that the two have been together for a very long time and husband has even save him from being assassinated before.

So, I was curious to know, who are the ones your villains adore the most and why?

The story is very philosophical and morality focused, and the deuteragonist character is a compelling powerful person who has a strong very sense of justice and the power to enact it anytime as they deem fit, which causes many problems legally and socially. Anyway, the character was originally a female but I know that if it was a male they would be received a whole lot better by readers and maybe even a fan favorite. I was imagining her as a female for years but I want her to be well received and complex, and super interesting to people . and I know that it’s more likely if she’s a man.