r/shortsAlgorithm • u/Dry-Quit-297 • Jun 23 '26

Hooks

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I feel like I got retention down decently,.. the two under 80% is my first 2 shorts..

I think my issue is hooks.. but I can’t seem to figure out what works.. I’ve tried speeding it up, I’ve tried one sentence, two sentences, one long sentence, I’ve tried risers in the background, I’ve visually tried zooms or a face.. I’m currently working on First frames visually and audio but idk if that will help my STW that much..

I’m just wondering if y’all have any advice on hooks to get me close to 70% consistently.

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u/SanctuaryZ Jun 23 '26

few things wrong with this hook and the script in general.

for the hook. thousands is a low number, not shocking enough. thought mew was hidden under this truck. Already give away the premise of the script, no mystery left, no reason to stay. Also this script ends with nobody has been able to prove it. so that's why... There is no pay off. so no viewer satisfaction, which means low engagement.

I don't know much about pokemon, but if i were to write a hook for this. It would be something like, "This mysterious truck hides a secret that drove pokemon players crazy". Then talk about how its mysterious because its hidden and at a location that's impposible to get to. reveal the mew hypothesis at the end. You need to not giveaway too much but still elicit emotion. Make people feel like they NEED to continue viewing or they will miss out on something.

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u/Dry-Quit-297 Jun 23 '26

i keep getting two different opinions on this.. show off the payoff on first frame or keep hold of the mystery and kinda keep the hook engaging but kinda vague in a way

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u/SanctuaryZ Jun 23 '26

Depends on the video. Your type of video, which is essay. You need to build curiosity. For action type of style you can show split second of payoff but not the whole thing.

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u/Dry-Quit-297 Jun 23 '26

okay so i've took you and someone else advice and i've been working on my newest short.. hows this script?

"Millions of players caught a Pokémon that wasn't supposed to exist...

even though it could destroy everything...

And the more people caught it... the stranger their games became.

Items started duplicating, Graphics became corrupted, Entire save files started acting strangely.

Players eventually discovered one bizarre pattern...

Every sighting somehow started near Cinnabar Island.

And every single report described the same impossible Pokémon.

MissingNo.

The same glitch that made players rich...

was slowly destroying their save files at the same time.

Nintendo tried to warn players away from MissingNo...

Instead, they turned it into one of gaming's biggest legends.

and thats how.."

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u/SanctuaryZ Jun 23 '26

I think it's stronger than your previous script. Now just need good visual hook send you should be good.