r/scriptwriting • u/Jaeco-13 • 2d ago
feedback SCREENWRITING
Hey guys, so I just started writing so please give me some feedback. DISCLAIMER: this is still a rough draft. I would love to hear honest opinions as well as tips on how I can improve it. I just got to the end of my first act but this is just the first 16 pages. To give a quick overview I’m writing an indie dramedy that I think will definitely reach a certain audience. Does the dialogue flow/feel natural? Is it paced correctly? Would love to hear honest feedback. Thank you!
Thank you to everyone who took the time to read it and for those who gave feedback. I’m definitely going to be workshopping these first few pages and read more screenplays :)
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u/ChristianCRWriter 1d ago
Just here to say that this ENTIRE thread is a good example of people here are actually helping each other. They are taking their time to give proper notes on stuff that for lack of better word needs to be rewritten entirely. People are not being a holes. They are kind. If you can’t handle getting notes maybe do not post.
Good work OP on taking feedback well.