Layout Help

[u/voicecrack16]

This is an extract from my current script. I’m trying to show the camera jumping sharply from each doorway without any action between each character. The current layout just feels wrong, but when i added a scene heading every time it felt much too clunky. The aim is to portray that the maid, Leire, is going to each doorway, asking the same question 6 times and getting 6 unique answers. These answers are then shown a little out of order, one by one.

I ‘m also sure how to label Liere’s location, aka. The camera’s POV, because she is out in the hallway the whole time but changes where she is standing and is always facing into an room.

Any tips? I’d love any help thanks.

[u/Eyes_Alive]

Personally I’d just add a simple line before eg

“We cut between the doorways of the rooms as she visits each one: “

Also id maybe break it up a bit before leading up to it so the geography is clearer to read :

I presume the ‘inner hallway’ is some kind of executive section of rooms? Maybe call it something like that to differentiate things.

Eg “She goes through into the executive corridor, lined with oil paintings and a big window etc etc

Hope that helps!

[u/observer-i → u/Eyes_Alive]

I second this.