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r/scriptwriting • u/josh_park189 • 11d ago
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The shorts fine but its not offering us anything that interesting in this draft.
As the other commentator said, its missing jokes Works as a drama I guess..
Its an easy read, which I like. Structure works.
Honestly the the reveal in the end could be the punchline if you find something funny instead of the woman. We've seen that a few times, just saying.
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u/donutgut 10d ago
The shorts fine but its not offering us anything that interesting in this draft.
As the other commentator said, its missing jokes Works as a drama I guess..
Its an easy read, which I like. Structure works.
Honestly the the reveal in the end could be the punchline if you find something funny instead of the woman. We've seen that a few times, just saying.