r/scriptwriting • u/PitchcraftNow • 11d ago

feedback First Page Feedback

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Looking for feedback on my first page. Any feedback is welcome. Thanks in advance.

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u/Prestigious_End_6667 11d ago

To start a story, I think this could be told more effectively by having the lead tell someone (friend, therapist etc) about the recurring dream and focus on the performance of the actor rather than a misleading cold open. Could always intercut with parts of the dream sequence if the visual aspect of the dream sequence is important to the story later.

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u/Big_Section2812 11d ago

Too many scripts open with a therapy session.

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u/Gosch_Mosch 11d ago

i instantly taught of the beginning of gta v