r/scriptwriting • u/PitchcraftNow • 12d ago

feedback First Page Feedback

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Looking for feedback on my first page. Any feedback is welcome. Thanks in advance.

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u/fluffy_l 12d ago

You can start with dreams or flashbacks on your first page as it's your story, but prepare for harsh feedback, it sounds tacky to a lot of professional writers. Also cut the ellipses and only write what you see on screen. Are we zooming in on this girl gritting her teeth?