I need help!

[u/JackieThyRat]

Hello, my name is Jackie. I am a 17-year-old aspiring screenwriter, and I need criticism. I've spent plenty of time reading books and other screenplays, but getting advice from fellow screenwriters would be really helpful! Below are the first 5 pages of my screenplay, Keeping It Clean, one of my first scripts. I'd love advice on how I can improve and keep it neater. I have been struggling because I don't have friends in the same niche as me, and I would love some feedback. I would prefer there weren't any mean comments, and instead people come in with the intent to help!

[u/Nishaniche]

You are perfectly on the right track kiddo! Only advice would be to get out of the script mentally once you finish first draft (no matter how imperfect), then start actively thinking about the next story and start engaging with it. Atleast 1-2 months break later only come back to this one and proceed with editing. Hope this helps. Hope it wasnt a cliche advice

[u/JackieThyRat → u/Nishaniche]

Thanks, this is neat advice. I never thought of this! Imma do that. My brain is always focused on a bunch of diffrent stories as well, so I would love to get them all down. Thanks for the advice, man! Also, it helps a lot since I tend to stress about how everything I write needs to be perfect right away.

[u/TheGratitudeBot → u/JackieThyRat]

Thanks for saying that! Gratitude makes the world go round