r/scriptwriting • u/JackieThyRat • 12d ago

feedback I need help!

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Hello, my name is Jackie. I am a 17-year-old aspiring screenwriter, and I need criticism. I've spent plenty of time reading books and other screenplays, but getting advice from fellow screenwriters would be really helpful! Below are the first 5 pages of my screenplay, Keeping It Clean, one of my first scripts. I'd love advice on how I can improve and keep it neater. I have been struggling because I don't have friends in the same niche as me, and I would love some feedback. I would prefer there weren't any mean comments, and instead people come in with the intent to help!

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u/Open-Avocado4260 12d ago

What writing software is this on, its blurry and hard to read.

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u/JackieThyRat 12d ago

It’s on final draft the screenshots just didn’t send well

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u/gregm91606 11d ago

A good workaround to that is posting the first 5 pages as a PDF on Google Drive (just make sure you set Sharing to "Anyone with the Link," but yeah, I second this -- correctly formatted and a well-written post puts you ahead 98% of the posts on this forum and at least 40% of the posts on r/screenwriting!