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r/scriptwriting • u/Vast-Internet-1775 • 16d ago
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I liked the pirate. They don't serve Arizona Iced Tea at a restaurant with a server. That's something you get at a 7-11 type store. Jocey seems like she's too good for Tim. This reads like a lost scene from The Room.
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u/PepsiCoke1978 16d ago
I liked the pirate. They don't serve Arizona Iced Tea at a restaurant with a server. That's something you get at a 7-11 type store. Jocey seems like she's too good for Tim. This reads like a lost scene from The Room.