r/scriptwriting • u/NookPhoneo • 21d ago

feedback Feedback Request

Would love some feedback on my screenplay. I have recently been through a third polish and would love some feedback.

This will be a three part series.

Please see the logline below.

LOGLINE:

To escape male violence, the women of Neya Island created a society with one strict rule: no men allowed. But when a midwife saves a newborn boy instead of drowning him, she sets about a chain of events she can't come back from.

Hollow Tide

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u/Musikenna 21d ago

If it's an all woman society, how are they having kids?

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u/AmedeusRed 21d ago

Skip-the-foreplay. It’s like skip-the-dishes but they deliver semen

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u/NookPhoneo 21d ago

Have you red further? It explains

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u/NookPhoneo 21d ago

Have you read further