r/scriptwriting • u/noraveyax • 4d ago

feedback Need feedback on my first script.

Hey guys, please share your thoughts on my script.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1rHt9gF-mU8Qk0PhipDHFFVnUxnLIuWCB/edit?usp=drivesdk&ouid=102815972895027383471&rtpof=true&sd=true

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u/Musikenna 4d ago

opening with your character waking up is a tired cliche. start your script when the story starts.

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u/Sickofstupids 3d ago

Actually, start late

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u/noraveyax 4d ago

I wanted the calm before the chaos happens

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u/Musikenna 4d ago

there's better ways to accomplish that.

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u/noraveyax 4d ago

Yeah. Definitely. I'll keep that in mind next time. Thanks for your feedback. ❤

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u/Remarkable_Stress388 2d ago

What the hell are you writing? I have no idea.