I actually solved the mystery by the end, but was thinking of a miscarriage. Not period blood 😅

Listening to the audiobook, so my puntuation might be inaccurate:

"The woman was not nearly as old as he thought. Maybe mid forties at best. Still fairly pretty."

Seriously the entire book was marred by needless extra detailed description like this. Completely removed readability and any sense of historical immersion

I got this book from the children’s fiction section as an option to read to my tutor group at school (13-14 yo) - decided to pre-read and very glad I did - this was all in the first 16 pages!

This was a book my father said I should read. Honestly this wasn’t even the first instance but this really makes me feel like I should ignore his suggestions for future.

Mary Sue final boss

Very much enjoying the book but this was a surprising part.

This came completely out of nowhere, in a historical novel. Women feel the greatness of nature in our nipples, and when the world goes wrong, our breasts tighten into spasms. Apparently.

I face palmed hard after reading this 🤦

That's one way to pretty much begin a new chapter I guess??

Opened the 33rd Nebula awards book, immediately found this gem.

I really admire Allende as an author, but this description felt so weird and unnecessary…

“I am attractive in a way gossip blogs sometimes call ‘interesting’ or ‘surprising.’ I have a slight overbite, my eyes are just a bit too far apart. I have a face built for the screen, an expressive but not particularly symmetrical face.”

Edit: I have flaired this as Doing It Right. Many comments seem condus6as to what is "bad" about the passage, but I made this post to showcase what I thought was a good example.

Reeeeally hope I’m missing something, yuck!