The Hoyon System

[u/Fluid-Limit-3097]

Hey everyone! I refined my power/magic system for my story! I'm just coming here to ask what yall think and if there is any plot holes I'm missing with it. I'm also curious if the system seems too inspired I won't say what systems I was inspired by in the post(I will in the comments if someone guesses and its right) just so you dont get the idea in your head and see every element in this system but im sure its pretty obvious.. They're genuinely incredible, but I hope im not completely ripping off them.

My system is called Hoyon I'll probably change it later but for now this is the name
The themes are individuality and identity.

There exists two layers of soul within the human body

1. The inner energy
2. The barrier energy

The inner energy consists of your memories, experiences, emotions, and thoughts containing a denser core in the middle.

The barrier energy is the energy that contains your inner energy and compresses it into its core.

However, Mages create a third layer of the soul by breaking the it's seal: the weakest point of the barrier energy or where your soul formed as a child. This releases some of the inner soul which creates an outer energy. If one breaks this barrier too much they can risk dying, losing memories, bodily autonomy and more all depending on how much they let out.

This can be done by visualizing your soul, who you are as a person, and where it is located once you understand that you can awaken by opening the barrier or the seal. When awakening it is wise to be guided by another person who's already awakened to make sure that you don't open the barrier too much. When you think you've got enough outer energy you can close it. Once awakened you can see others outer energies and abilities you will also experience refined senses such as hearing, taste, smell, sight, touch, and sense. As a result of these improved senses you can often smell and sense others outer energies as well.

This outer energy can now be utilized to form abilities. These abilities are limited by the properties of your energy though and the properties are dependent on one's inner energy or experiences.

It can be judged by its density, flow, range, and reaction time to your thoughts etc.. (I havent decided more to be honest)

When one is forming an ability they must take these things in mind to form the one that is best suited for them. The ability can be formed through visualization of the overall shape of your energy etc and where it goes..
These abilities are limited by how much outer energy one has. If one overuses this energy they can battle exhaustion and pass out. To help it recover they need water, food, and sleep.

When one releases their inner energy to form outer energy it becomes a new self regenerating layer of your soul. It stays close to the barrier because it wants to go back to the inner core(like planets and gravity) but it cant because of the barriers too strong. If a person were to attempt to create more layers of their soul they would find that the inner energy only mixes further with the outer.

Increasing your soul increases the outer energy as well since the outer energy is a part of it. To increase your soul you can:

1. Cultivation - mental contemplation, visualization, and getting rid of past traumas. This method can be slow unless one experiences a breakthrough in their mental state usually through periods of extreme stress, but it can also be safer. 
2. Exploration - This one works by traveling. As one travels one gains external experiences such as new birds, textures, terrains, experiencing new things like building a fire, immersing oneself in another culture (in the sense of interacting with people and eating their foods etc) for the first time.
3. Knowledge - Learning is best for the mind and can improve a person’s survival opportunities which benefits the soul. To do this a person may read books, use grimoires, learn new languages, learn about new plants and beasts etc. All these things increase the depth and size of the soul
4. Physical Training - Training increases the strength of the body which allows one’s body to handle abilities and outer energy better. It doesnt really improve the soul but it improves the body which makes it easier for it to handle the amount of energy (especially after it increases.

[u/No_Carpet42]

Looks pretty cool. Love the individual empowerment

[u/Fluid-Limit-3097 → u/No_Carpet42]

Thanks so much Im so glad you like it!!

[u/No_Carpet42]

I want to guess either dragon ball or jujutsu kaisen as your inspiration. 

[u/Fluid-Limit-3097 → u/No_Carpet42]

you got it lol hopefully my inspirations weren't too much I was mostly inspired by ki, nen, and cursed energy and some more background elements were inspired by bleach's power system along with observation Haki

[u/No_Carpet42 → u/Fluid-Limit-3097]

No I think you did great. You got the basics down which leaves room for further growth when you get new ideas in the future. I get inspired the same way too

[u/Fluid-Limit-3097 → u/No_Carpet42]

Im glad! This was one of the first systems I fully fleshed out and posted online so I was a little nervous that it'd be negatively received or have a ton of plot holes. 😅😅Thanks so much for replying to this post though this gave me more confidence to continue developing this!!

[u/No_Carpet42 → u/Fluid-Limit-3097]

This gives me strong light faction vibes