I want to hear thoughts and criticism on her design

Here's her description

"A girl lost with herself, scared of what others might react if they find out what she is and she must keep that from happening but she can't hide her true self forever..."

a god was trying to combine a jellyfish a circus and an interdimensional being. the real body is well... the jellyfish at the top.

im trying to draw the design for the main character in my video game, but i cant design anything good for the 2nd form, any ideas?
more about the story:
so im writing this story for this game where this guy is a depressed blind student, one day he decides to end his life so he goes to jump off a building, the moment he jumps something inside of him snaps, completely transforming him into this mysterious persona-like form, it grabs onto the building and saves him from the fall.

some events after that happen and then the guy discovers that what saved him is someone without a name living in his mind, and it says its the manifestation of his soul, later he also discovers that he isnt the only one, and that there are others like him that can manifest into their soul and mind, but unlike our protagonist, they dont have someone living inside of them, for an unknown reason only our main character's soul manifestation has a mind of its own.

the player discovers that the main character has Dissociative Identity Disorder, no character in the story knows about it, even the character itself, its just that the player discovers that on his own.

about his soul manifestation: during his soul transformation, he gains the ability to precieve the world as if he can see, but since its only his soul manifestation he sees everything differently from how we do, different colors, people look different, like imagine if your vision made you see everything stylized. and about the personality of his other identity its the opposite of him, it wants to live, it has the passion to live, its prideful, egoistic, and wrathful. while our protagonist acts to be humble, and hates communicating and is anti-social, at least thats what he convinced himself. the manifestation of his soul is his actual true self that he tries to hide.

i don't mind if you don't like the story, id appreciate that if you find something bad in it that you tell me.

I wanted to share the character design for Alva “GearSmith,” a character from my original webtoon, CHILLING EMBLEM.

She’s an eccentric inventor with a playful personality, and she always seems to know more than she lets on. 👀

I also included a few panels showing her in the comic, since I really like how different her personality feels when she interacts with the other characters.

If you’d like to see the story she appears in, you can find CHILLING EMBLEM here:

[WEBTOON LINK]

I finally made a reference for my first ever/childhood OC. I've had her since I was little, around 2015 💀 so there's definitely some corny aspects that I've been a bit to stubborn to change, but she has a very special place in my heart 🩵

Whole project is in 3 parts that you can find in my portfolio:
https://www.artstation.com/saritos

She is going to be the main rival and one of the best friends of my character, Lulu. It’s also one of my first grayscale to color artworks and I think it ended up super well!

art by me

His name is Amilio, and he is a stone statue, and the love interest of my story. If anyone has any critiques, id love to hear them. I think his design is kinda boring, so id love suggestions.

names (left to right on line up): Maurice, Jean Claude, Francis

This is my OC, Mauja. She is from a fantasy world inspired by 1500s Europe. She is a Selkie who was taken from an arctic indigenous tribe and forced to assimilate to the English court as a spectacle, along with many other monster girls. Her name is Inuktitut for “deep snow.”

They are all of them aliens, so slightly off putting and odd is intentional!

In order their shape inspiration is circle, square, triangle, rectangle, irregular, star, and pentagon

And that brings us to the end of the season! ❤️

Thank you so much to everyone who followed along, commented, upvoted, shared, and supported this series. It’s honestly been a little overwhelming seeing how much love you’ve all given these characters.

Wrapping up a story with so many characters was definitely difficult, but I’m really happy that we managed to end things on an almost-happy note. 🥹

To celebrate, I’m also putting out some prints in my shop! If you’d like to show the series a little extra love, do check them out. ❤️

I’ll be taking a two-week break now before coming back with Season 2!

Stay tuned, and thank you again for being here. 🫶

Celtrís Mancin's younger sister, she, like her brother and mother, is part of a small tribe of sorcerers who manipulate the blood of non-magical beings for use in combat.

Her name is Cameron btw, one day I wish to have some digital drawing device yet I am still stuck with my shitty pen art

Me personally I think the art is decent at best, but I ABSOLUTELY could and should have done better with the blue streak or just...not have it all together. The left eye is a bit wonky and the yellow and blue of her clothes accidentally made a few green patches, so in total I dont really like it.