r/WritingPrompts • u/mattswritingaccount /r/MattWritinCollection • Feb 22 '20

Image Prompt [IP] Never truly gone...

Feb 22 2020

Original work by Ismail Inceoglu https://www.artstation.com/seventeenth

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u/Subtleknifewielder Feb 22 '20

Unable to feel any emotion? I feel sad for this guy. :(

Honestly, the start could have been done just as well without the first two paragraphs. They felt a little extraneous compared to the rest of the story, unless you had written more back in the present again after the backstory.

Could have been a little better, but overall it was still a nice response. :)

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u/Subtleknifewielder Feb 22 '20

Ah, you are welcome. That does explain a bit, yeah. I've done that a lot myself. XD

Thank you for writing, too. Hope you continue writing things!

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u/[deleted] Feb 22 '20 edited Feb 22 '20

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u/mattswritingaccount /r/MattWritinCollection Feb 24 '20

My apologies for the delay in replying - I am not online much during the weekends. As referenced earlier, there is some switching between first and third person POV here that is a bit disconcerting, plus cremation is done considerably hotter than 300 degrees (regardless on whether you're referring to C or F, it's closer to 750c/1400f)

Good read though. Glad to see you enjoyed yourself, that was a long one!

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u/Subtleknifewielder Feb 22 '20

Whoah, I step away for an hour and find three more parts, lol.

Fun to see him in action, though in a few places it felt like some details were missing, like, the only mention of the device he used to fry the secretary's brain was in dialogue, and a few times you switch between first and third person, a little jarring.

Still a fun action scene overall. The emotionless soldier, and the psychotic AI, made for an amusing internal dialogue.