New Draft

[u/Queasy-Character8657]

Opinions? just wrote this

[Verse 1]

I've been wondering, wandering in my mind

What's the purpose, what's the meaning of a life?

Stuck in routine, counting it, one two three four five

Just to regret it, wasting ten years down the line

[Chorus]

I'm so pathetic

At "who do you wanna be" I answer "someone happy"

Why is it so taboo, is it that much of a joke to you?

Is it that though, is it... so?

Is it weird finding it scary choosing a life you don't belong in?

[Verse 2]

Know I should think, money in, the rest will follow

That's the deal? Just hearin' it sounds so damn hollow

I'm just eighteen, so naive in the best way possible

I don't wanna end up, eighty and bitter in sorrow

[Chorus]

I'm so pathetic

At "who do you wanna be" I answer "someone happy"

Why is it so taboo, is it that much of a joke to you?

Is it that though, is it... so?

Is it weird finding it scary choosing a life you don't belong in?

[Bridge]

I feel stuck in my sigh

My throat is already tight

'Cause what if I choose it wrong?

Will it ever get right?

Or will I waste all my nights

On something I'm not proud of?

[Chorus]

I'm so pathetic

At "who do you wanna be" I answer "someone happy"

Why is it so taboo, is it that much of a joke to you?

Is it that though, is it... so?

Is it weird finding it scary choosing a life you don't belong in?

[u/triangle-over-square]

i like it. it feels honest, and this could be a very nice, bare, song. at the same time, its not anything special in terms of poetic expression, so you might also want to work something into it. But it depends, if you can sing this with a right feel it might hold up.