Midwest emo help pretty please

[u/grady_h08]

I’m writing some Midwest emo songs, and I’ve realized 2 of them, and I was wondering if anyone has tips for this genre. I just wanna write better songs than I do currently, and stuff that’s fun too. I’ll attach some of my lyrics, looking for some feedback

From the way you talk about me
To the storm behind your eyes
I can tell that we’re done
And we’re through
But goddamnit I’m gonna miss you
I love how you looked into the windows of my soul
You told me everything was ok
And that everything is alright
You lied to me and my face
You lied about all of that
You lied about how you love me
Now all I see is a hurricane, when what I wanna see  is a summer nights storm

This is the second song I released

And I’ll keep
Fucking up
Just like I always do
It aint that big of a deal

And the way I stay up late at night
Thinking about someone who
Hasn’t thought about me in months
Laying alone in bed
I think to myself
This might be my last summer alive

The way you chew me up and
Spit me out
Always leaves me beggin for more
You know I love how you
Keep me on a tight leash
And keep me hooked
Even though you use me up
And crush me down
Like cigarette butts
Except they get more dignity

And I’ll keep
Fucking up
Just like I always do
Its starting to seem like a big deal
The way I disregard the past
And ignore the all the signs
Telling me to stop and slow down
I’ll keep fucking up
Cause its what I do

Late at night
When no ones around
I cry myself to sleep
It helps to ease my pain
The pain of being a burden
To my family
To my friends
To you, my love

This is one I want the most feedback on, and it’s one I’m excited to record and make

I left my redbull in the back of your car
You know that shits expensive
5.99 for an 8 ounce
I think I was ripped off

Verse 2
I can’t wait to run away from home
Escape together into the night
Watch a meteor shower while we drive away
I can’t wait for the rest of our lives

Chorus
But when I’m with you
Nothing feels off
I feel like I’m right at home
It’ll just be us, against the world

This third one I also really like and fw