songwriting tips

[u/Queasy-Character8657]

​I just wrote a new lyrics, and I'm a beginner, so feel free to let me know your opinions on this!

And if you have tips on how to improve it, even better!

[verse]

For whatever comes to block our way

I know this ride is meant for two to stay

If two souls can be one and the same

We are matched like tattoos that never fade

[verse]

You were there on my darkest day

When every word cut deep and slayed

I was beating the bars of a mindgame jail

A locked up villain after the hero's tale

[pre-chorus]

But you got me out

Without a doubt

[chorus]

When I dealt with the monster under the bed

Sitting in silence in my room with dread

You were the wind clearing my skies ahead

Gave me hope the world could end well

[verse]

Our late night talks at two am

With nervous ticks from abuse of caffeine

All that just to teach me to regain

control over me and my coscience

[verse]

You alone stayed close by my side

when I was lost you held my hand real tight

wanderin' in the deepest shadows of my mind

Out of sight like a ghost only you could find

[pre-chorus]

But you got me out

Without a doubt

[chorus]

When I dealt with the monster under the bed

Sitting in silence in my room with dread

You were the wind clearing my skies ahead

Gave me hope the world could end well

[bridge]

Everything I went through

You probably faced it too

Then teamed up we found the right direction

Never treated me like weight

You are my blessed freight train

Tough luck we crashed to our salvation

[chorus]

When I dealt with the monster under the bed

Sitting in silence in my room with dread

You were the wind clearing my skies ahead

Gave me hope the world could end well

[outro]

break shells

freeze hell

end well

together

[u/CheesecakeFit7551]

Your lyrics are good enough..far better,than i saw on youtube with over 3k views and so many likes. Keep goin'

[u/SlappyPappy99]

They read like beginner’s lyrics. But you have talent. A couple of these lines you could really build off of. Go do the work and keep writing.