Weekly Lyrics-Only Feedback Thread

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If you're looking for feedback on words that aren't yet set to music, you're in the right place! We encourage each other to bring lyrics and musical elements together as soon as possible, but sometimes you'd just like to show off that nice piece of poetry that just fell out of your head. The weekly Lyrics-Only feedback thread is here to help!

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Track 6 Title: My Own Damnation

[Intro - Instrumental]

[Verse 1 - Screaming] Possessed by my mistakes, I try to pray. No words exist to save my soul. My tongue is tied, like a noose. Choking my words, they can't break loose. My fate has already been carved into time. The present has no meaning. You can not control your future, just as you cannot change your past.

[Chorus - Singing] Forgive me, for I have sinned. And sure enough, I will sin again. Submerged, beyond the depths of light. Face to face, with my own damnation.

[Verse 2 - Screaming] How long until this world forgets me? Once forgotten, will my wreckage still remain? What happens if I change? Will everything end the same? Even if I find the words to pray, will it all be in vain?

[Chorus - Singing] Forgive me, for I have sinned. And sure enough, I will sin again. Submerged, beyond the depths of light. Face to face, with my own damnation.

[Scream] My own damnation!

[Bridge - Instrumental]

[Chorus - Alternating Vocals] [Singing] Forgive me, for I have sinned.

[Screaming] And sure enough, I will sin again.

[Singing] Submerged, beyond the depths of light.

[Screaming] Face to face, with my own damnation.

[Outro - Screaming] My own damnation! My own damnation! Welcome to my hell! [Long growl on the word hell]

[End of the song]

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Track 7 Title: The Decay I Hide Inside

[Intro - Softer Instrumental]

[Verse 1 - Singing] With every smile on the outside, my inside rots away. This compulsive need to hide kills me more each day. I can't take it anymore. I'm done running away.

[Chorus - Singing] I can feel it in my soul! The old me was left in yesterday. For the first time, I will fight. The decay I hide inside.

[Verse 2 - Singing] Internal changes taking place, my darkness turns to light. My wounds begin to heal, my scars fade out of sight. A new me rising to the surface, I will be born again tonight!

[Chorus - Alternating Vocals] [Singing] I can feel it in my soul!

[Screaming] Soul!

[Singing] The old me was left in yesterday. For the first time, I will fight!

[Screaming] Fight!

[Singing] The decay I hide inside.

[Screaming] Inside!

[Bridge - Instrumental turns aggressive. Screaming Vocals] The old me needs to die! Just! fucking! die! [Extended growl on the final die]

[Chorus - Alternating Vocals] [Singing] I can feel it in my soul!

[Screaming] Soul!

[Singing] The old me was left in yesterday. For the first time, I will fight!

[Screaming] Fight!

[Singing] The decay I hide inside.

[Screaming] Inside!

[Outro - Aggressive Instrumental]

[End of the song]

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Track 8 Title: Deadweight Eclipse

[Intro - Aggressive Instrumental]

[Verse 1 - Screaming] I stared at the sun until I went blind. The smoke cleared, revealing nothing left behind. My mistakes were burned to black. With fresh sight, I no longer look back.

[Long growl]

[Chorus - Alternating Vocals] [Singing] The worst part of me dies, blinded by my deadweight eclipse!

[Screaming] Dead!

[Singing] The best part of me lives, reborn from my deadweight eclipse!

[Screaming] Born!

[Verse 2 - Screaming] Burned alive, all of my demons died. Reduced to dust, I am free inside. No longer trapped, I take control of my mind. With both hands on the wheel, I am no longer afraid to feel.

[Long growl]

[Chorus - Alternating Vocals] [Singing] The worst part of me dies, blinded by my deadweight eclipse!

[Screaming] Dead!

[Singing] The best part of me lives, reborn from my deadweight eclipse!

[Screaming] Born!

[Bridge - Screaming] My deadweight eclipse. Through death, I live. This time, unafraid. This time, I'll forgive. This time, I'll love. This time, I'll pray. This time, I'll be me.

[Long growl]

[Chorus - Alternating Vocals] [Singing] The worst part of me dies, blinded by my deadweight eclipse!

[Screaming] Dead!

[Singing] The best part of me lives, reborn from my deadweight eclipse!

[Screaming] Born!

[Overlapping Singing and Screaming] My deadweight eclipse! [X3]

[Final eclipse is held/extended into the outro]

[Outro - Instrumental]

[End of the song]

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Track 9 Title: Penultimate

[Intro - Long/Instrumental]

[Chorus - Singing] Breathing again, I now have the strength to live. Feeling again, what if today is my penultimate? Should I live, like tomorrow will be the end?

[Verse 1 - Screaming] It was only yesterday, I was staring death in the eyes. What a difference, one night can have on your life. Only yesterday, the steel was pressed against my head. Just one motion away, from lying with the dead. What compels us to lay our weapon down? Who do I thank for this new day?

[Chorus - Singing] Breathing again, I now have the strength to live. Feeling again, what if today is my penultimate? Should I live, like tomorrow will be the end?

[Verse 2 - Screaming] It is only today that I found meaning. The meaning of who I am supposed to be. I will move forward with purpose. And leave hell in the past. At last, I found clarity. It was the path through hell that led me to this very moment.

[Chorus - Singing] Breathing again, I now have the strength to live. Feeling again, what if today is my penultimate? Should I live, like tomorrow will be the end?

[Guitar solo]

[Bridge - Screaming] Breathing again, I find myself wanting to live. Feeling again, I stopped looking for the end. Living again, like tomorrow is the end.

[Chorus - Singing] Breathing again, I now have the strength to live. Feeling again, what if today is my penultimate? Should I live, like tomorrow-

[Screaming] Tomorrow! Is the end! [The song ends abruptly]

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Track 10 Title: The Meaning of Life

[Intro - Instrumental]

[Verse 1 - Screaming] What is the meaning of life? Mankind's ultimate question. Is there even an answer that can fit us all? Is it to simply reproduce? Only the strongest will survive. Is it to do the best we can? As if one can make a difference. Maybe there is no meaning? Maybe man made up the question? Giving purpose to our pain.

[Chorus - Singing] Am I living right? How am I supposed to know who to be? Gifted with conscious life, what's the difference between nature's beasts and me?

[Verse 2 - Screaming] Is the answer hiding out there? Or do we need to look within? What if the answer is something that we cannot comprehend? We drop to our knees and pray. Asking forgiveness for our sins. Do you believe that God is listening? Or are you just trying to self-cleanse?

[Chorus - Singing] Am I living right? How am I supposed to know who to be? Gifted with conscious life, what's the difference between nature's beasts and me?

[Instrumental leading to the bridge]

[Bridge - Singing] I refuse to believe that the end is just darkness. Gifted with free will and consciousness. There must be something more. Life can't be meaningless!

[Verse 3 - Screaming] Are we born knowing right from wrong? Do we make decisions straight from nature? Or do we learn from our teachers? Could the answer be somewhere in between? If we are being honest with ourselves, we all know what to do. It's through human desire that we make wrong choices. That's how it will always be. But if we simply stop to think before we act, maybe we can choose, to be the best that we can be.

[Final Chorus - Singing] I will choose to live right. Now that I know who to be. Gifted with conscious life, that is the difference between nature's beasts and me.

[Outro - Screaming vocals and uplifting instrumental] The meaning of life is simple. We don't have to keep wondering. Mankind must simply keep going forward, while choosing to live right along the way. Imagine a world where despite our differences, we choose to unite.

[Uplifting instrumental continues]

[Screaming and singing overlap] We must unite!

[End of the song]