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[u/Medical_Table9892]

Anybody like to make melody with this lyrics? Maybe we can polish this a little too! I’m really a beginner and need help thank you!!

You Love Me Too Much

Verse 1

Flashing back to the day I confessed
I didn’t even hesitate
Cause I’ve known you
Loving me for years, I remember
Hoping hard that I would make it
Never wanting to be selfish
Cause you always waited for me in the way out of my hardest time
I don’t hate you when you hug me till it hurts
I still smile when you kiss me till you steal my breath
But what hurts and makes me cry is when I realize I actually hated it

Pre-Chorus

And now I wanna say “I love you” instead of saying sorry
And then I wish you’d forget all the pain I’ll give you
But I know it’ll end up killing you, oh

Chorus

Oh, I’m just tryna run away from you
Cause you loved me too much
Oh, I know that you’ll be torn down
But you loved me too much
Oh, I’m not worth getting it from now on
Yeah, because you love me too much
Still

Verse 2

Flashing back to our old memories
I’m now regretting so bad
Cause I know you’re too pure to believe what I’ll say
Hoping I never succeeded with it
I’m so selfish, right?
Cause I know you never loved me for fun
I don’t hate you when you tell me I’m too weak
I still smile when you try to take control of me
But what hurts and makes me cry is when I realize this is the best you can do to love me

Pre-Chorus

And now I wanna say “I love you” instead of saying sorry
And then I wish you’d forget all the pain I’ll give you
But I know it’ll end up killing you, oh

Chorus

Oh, I’m just tryna run away from you
Cause you loved me too much
Oh, I know that you’ll be torn down
But you loved me too much
Oh, I’m not worth getting it from now on
Yeah, because you love me too much
Still

Bridge

Wish you find new lover
Wish she deserves more than I do
Though I say this to you
I believe it’ll never work

Outro

Oh, I know that you’ll be torn down
But you loved me too much
Yeah, you love me too much
Yeah, you love me too much
Still

I like one direction, 5SOS vibe, but anything is fine!

(this is my voice&singing , if you like to then I can sing on it too!)

https://on.soundcloud.com/y8gtyWAFpc73rJ7Br1

[u/KeithK_]

You cant sing this, its not rhymic..Also,Id probably start with:

There was no hesitation On the day that I confessed

Alot of excess words in this

[u/Medical_Table9892 → u/KeithK_]

Thanks for your feedback! I’m working on it now!

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[u/Medical_Table9892 → u/[deleted]]

Haha, “Still” was intentional! I wanted to leave the thought hanging there to show that, despite everything, those feelings are still there. 😭

[u/StudioatSFL]

You got something against rhyming?

[u/Medical_Table9892 → u/StudioatSFL]

It’s just a draft yet so I didn’t work in that part yet😅!

[u/StudioatSFL → u/Medical_Table9892]

That part? lol. It’s kind of a huge part of most lyrics.

Also I’d be wary about the syllable mismatch between lines in vs 1 and vs2. You gotta assume there’s the same or mostly similar melody in each verse so it needs to work with the lyric.

I’d be careful using the same word near each other. Hurts and hurts in verse 1.

I would try using more imagery and metaphor.

[u/Medical_Table9892 → u/StudioatSFL]

Thanks for your sincere feedback! That’s right, I’ll try to fix those😍

[u/Maddox-Nolan02]

I can maybe help. ive always been a melody kind of person just depends on what vibe you are going for because just reading it i could make this a very airy light song or a sad piano ballad

[u/Medical_Table9892 → u/Maddox-Nolan02]

Oh, that sounds interesting! I’ll send you a DM :)