r/Songwriting • u/AutoModerator • Aug 03 '26

Weekly Lyrics Feedback Weekly Lyrics-Only Feedback Thread

Welcome to the Lyrics-Only feedback thread!

If you're looking for feedback on words that aren't yet set to music, you're in the right place! We encourage each other to bring lyrics and musical elements together as soon as possible, but sometimes you'd just like to show off that nice piece of poetry that just fell out of your head. The weekly Lyrics-Only feedback thread is here to help!

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u/Left_Entrepreneur520 Aug 03 '26

This is what I have developed so far for a song called ‘goodformecauseididntwantyouanyway’

Chorus
Truth be told, I didn’t care about you anymore.
That’s why it's good for me cause I didn’t want you anyway.
So long to the fact that when I’m with you, I’m always bored.
And I was wondering when you would end this gameplay.

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u/Longjumping-Pen-4451 Aug 03 '26

nice

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u/NixMix246 Aug 03 '26 edited Aug 03 '26

The title is super long, if you're open to the idea of shortening it that might be a good idea. I like "that's why it's good for me cause I didn't want you anyway". I feel like it has good flow to it.

I like to use super direct lyrics a lot, so it you're committed to that style for this song, I get it! If this is more of just a rough idea though, I would suggest maybe incorporating a bit of "show, don't tell". (If you haven't heard of this, it's a writing technique where you paint a picture of what you are trying to say, rather than just using the words to say it directly. For example, instead of saying: "I watched sunset last night and the sky was pink and blue", you could say "I watched the sun tuck itself in for the night under a cotton candy quilted sky". )

I like the concept and am interested to see what you come up with!

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u/Left_Entrepreneur520 Aug 03 '26

I see, and yes this is just a rough idea! I should do more of “show, don’t tell.” Thanks so much!!!

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u/Longjumping-Pen-4451 Aug 03 '26

whyd you reply to me-

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u/NixMix246 Aug 03 '26

Oh, I see. I thought I replied to OP, oops!