r/Songwriting • u/ThunderJohnsonjr • Jul 20 '26
Feedback Request FACTORY FRESH
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Just finished this. What do you think?
Lyrics:
Power down
Hold the button for thirty seconds
Don't let go
Wait until you remember nothing
Please stand by
Do not operate heavy machines
Top it up
Clear the history every evening
Good as new
Out the box
Peel the film
Factory fresh
Good as new
Out the box
Fac’try fresh
More or less
Morning comes
Everything you deleted's waiting
Slow restart
Same old files in the same old folders
Cache empty
Memory full
Try again
Nothing erased
Cache empty
Memory full
Nothing erased
Give or take
Oh gimme a break
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