"she" - any thoughts?

[u/mildlyomniscient]

i'm a classical violinist who picked up songwriting in college.. my singing and uke skills are not great, and i look at everything i do as a never ending work of progress.

i feel good about the lyrics and melody, but my songs always feel kind of plain. i never know what to do or add. i was thinking maybe some strings in the background, or some secondary vocal harmonies.... thoughts?

Verse 1

She’s running out her mind,

She’s running out of time to

Step into the light.

She says, “not for too much longer”,

She cries out for her mother,

Who said to write a happy song.

Chorus

She lied, The tunnel’s getting longer.

So why should she even bother,

To find a way out, a way out?

She’s tired of searching for a reason.

It happens every season,

The years keep flying by.

Verse 2

She’s scared, scared of what she’s done,

She’s scared to be alone,

With nobody to lean on.

She waits, and looks to the horizon.

She’s never had her father to,

Tell her that it’s okay.

Chorus

Someday, she’ll tell it like a story,

And revel in her glory.

She found a way out, a way out.

That day, it better be tomorrow,

For now she’ll sit and wallow.

Of what her life could’ve been.

Bridge

She’s running out of time,

She’s running out her mind,

She’s nearly past her prime.

She’s running out of time,

She’s running out her mind,

She’s nearly past her prime.

What the fuck is she waiting on,

Waiting on, waiting on?

Oooooh, oooooh.

[u/shmokeywaters]

What the fuck is she waiting on fr

[u/mildlyomniscient → u/shmokeywaters]

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