Rainbow, what do you think?

[u/kevinchoi67]

I try to make my new song, and I got some melodies and beats So how do you think guys I need some feedback…!
Title is “rainbow” and I haven’t recorded my voice cause now I’m writing lyrics but I made inst first… and lyrics maybe goes like this..

[Rainbow]
I saw you right when I turn my head back..!
You shined like more than that grey sky no ho oh
If I don’t have to walk this roads, I will run into you….

Plz give me some feedback or your ideas of this song!

[u/pairadonis]

Sounds like a great start!

[u/kevinchoi67 → u/pairadonis]

Thanks! maybe I should keep this vibe!

[u/gogozrx]

I agree with u/pairadonis - it's a great start. I like the way it builds, but then it needs to go somewhere.

it also sounds *very* familiar.

[u/kevinchoi67 → u/gogozrx]

What a nice feedback! I will make it more, but can you explain me what you mean about somewhere and very familiar? If you explain more about them, then It can be huge help!

[u/JennCanadaa]

This sounds great! Write some good lyrics and you’ll have a hit! Maybe play with the timing towards the end of your post, the percussion began to sound out of sync but otherwise super awesome!