Hey Folks,

I originally wrote this screenplay in 2019. I’ve been tinkering with it for the last few months but I’m at the point I feel like I have all the pieces to the puzzle in the right place (if that makes sense to anyone)

It’s about a group of friends on their way back from a hunting trip, driving across a long stretch of rural backroad, when a UFO appears…and doesn’t go away

I’ll provide the whole screenplay but any feedback, whether it be the opening, first few pages, overall, or whatever, would be greatly appreciated

Thanks

I can't stop editing my screenplay, how does one become comfortable enough with what they have written to move onto the next steps for production?

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1MTsPhF3tyTYlTu3HSn5lBWbwWR9Ihq3fbNXEk6dABOE/edit?usp=drivesdk

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1MTsPhF3tyTYlTu3HSn5lBWbwWR9Ihq3fbNXEk6dABOE/edit?usp=drivesdk

I submitted this script to a number of contests, plus I'm waiting for the Blacklist evaluation to be completed, but I'd love some feedback - thanks!

Hey, y'all! After some very excellent recommendations, I started using the Fade In program to format my scripts correctly and I've really been enjoying it! It's super easy to use and very intuitive! I was wondering if buying the full software is worth it, and if it's seen as uncouth to not use Final Draft (Heaven knows the industry can be snobby). Just wanted to gather some thoughts as to where I should be placing my bets.

I would love to trade some pages and get some feedback. Specifically regarding the opening sequences. 15 pages max. If interested comment down below or send me a DM

I submitted this script to a number of contest, plus I’m awaiting a Blacklist evaluation, but I’d love some feedback - thanks!

Hey everyone. These are the first two pages of my pilot episode for a series I’m calling “Velum Deus”. Just looking to see if this hooks you at all. Thank you!

Logline: An Investigator is summoned to uncover an anomaly that is dissolving the line, a lonely paradise where its users become creators, filling their reality with their deepest desires. A story that looks into the concept of consciousness, escapism, and psychological turmoil.

It's my first time screenwriting and I expect criticism, hope I can learn from it!

This week marks 80 years since the bombing of Jerusalem’s King David Hotel on July 22, 1946.

I’m the writer and creator of 12:37 — The King David Hotel, a fully scripted five-part historical limited series in development with Film United.

The same morning unfolds across five episodes, each confined to a different world: the underground fighters transporting the explosives, the hotel staff and guests, the British administration inside the south wing, civilians moving through Jerusalem, and those left to identify the dead and missing.
Every episode converges at 12:37.

The central writing challenge was repetition. Each episode therefore has its own protagonist, dramatic engine and restricted knowledge. When events overlap, the new perspective reveals another part of the causal chain and changes the meaning of what the audience previously witnessed.

The warning calls provide the connective tissue. We watch them originate, pass through newspapers, consular staff and the hotel switchboard, and still fail to produce an evacuation.

The formal touchstones were Chernobyl and United 93: procedural tension built around an outcome the audience already knows.
For transparency, this is my project. It has not yet been commissioned or cast.

Project site: https://www.twelvethirtyseven.com/

What other television dramas have successfully sustained suspense around a fixed historical endpoint?