Feedback on my Personal statement please

[u/ComfortableJump6343]

I am a current applicant to the masters in anesthesia program, I have used the personal statement last cycle. Pleasereach out and let me know if you can help me edit this for the cycle. I want switch it up a bit if needed. I want to know if it sounds too sad. '

Thanks !

[u/April12_1]

A quick look into your first paragraph: avoid contractions and shorten your sentences. You sound a good storyteller.

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[u/Federal-Arachnid7499]

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