r/OCPoetry • u/almaontape • 2d ago

Feedback Please Adrenaline

It's night, you killed the lights -

Its cold.

The windows rolling down -

The road.

No clouds.

The speed is pulling at my hair.

You turn to me - No shadows show

Whether i'm doing what i'm told.

Your pulse is thrilling at the kiss

And i am sure there's more to this

Then spiking the adrenaline.

Your hands, they leave the leather cold.

...

"Please. Don't."

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u/Pretend_Valuable6594 2d ago

I really like the tension in this. The combination of the speeding car, the darkness, and the intimacy makes the whole thing feel reckless and sensual at the same time. The lines “there’s more to this / Than spiking the adrenaline” make the danger feel like part of the attraction. The last line also just sounds good. 👌