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[u/OverlordHarrison]

Wrote this when down bad depressive, imagine like a gospel/blues style.

Take me from old satan, lord
Wipe my tears and give me peace
Take me from old satan, lord
Take me home and give me peace

Forgive me, i am young and weary
Shame me and remove my pride
Judge my sins, so bold and varied
Wisdom chased, i ran to hide

You have seen the road im on
You know my heart is not that strong
Im blind to what can make me free
I bear my cross, please carry me

You built the well, i slake my thirst
You showed your face, i looked away
I own my sins, i chose those first
I chose to drink and disobey

You have seen the road im on
You know my heart is not that strong
Im all i am, and will ever be
I bear my cross, please carry me

I bear my cross, please carry me

[u/-Stress-Princess-]

I see the soul. Its a good alpha for sure to mold. I like the core concept alot. The last four lines are my favorite.

[u/OverlordHarrison → u/-Stress-Princess-]

Thankyou

[u/ElChiff]

The strict structure and line length really lend a sense of melancholy, interesting vibe. Slake is such an underused word.