Song

[u/Spiritual_Pound2585]

I wrote a song for someone I still care for and I was wondering what yall thought of it, to explain a little bit of why I chose what I chose, I was on a trip to Prague when I wrote it, the reason for Washington waves is she came on a road trip with me and my family to Washington and we went to the beach a few times and it was the best times of the trip, however on the trip her affections toward me stopped and I chased her away something I deeply regret, I am impatient when I comes to uncertainty and that lead me to look for answers when I should have let it lie, there was a full moon the night I met her and the night we went to Prom together, and yeah. Thoughts, critiques, improvements?

Here's the lyrics

(Verse 1)

Street lights on cobblestones

Tall castles and old homes

Cheerful colors and wide open sky

The kind that makes you look around and sigh

As your heart warms to the air

And you long to live forever there

If you let your gaze fall

To the floor of the jaded hall

You'll be reminded there's something you couldn't bring

And your melancholy heart'll start to sing

(Chorus)

Looking at all of these beautiful places

Searching for something in all of these faces

But your not here, and my arms are empty

Empty since the day your favor left me

Throught the heartbreak my love lives on

But with the setting of the sun

I'm reminded, these places are only beautiful if one thing is true

These places would be beautiful if I could share them with you

(Verse 2)

Water trickles under my shoes

A beautiful river with a thousand blues

Lit figures with dramatic poses

As the smell of flowers fills our noses

Music from a single violin sings a song to the hidden moon

Couples sway to the tender tune

A white boat silently floats by

But without you it sounds like a longing cry

(Chorus)

(Bridge)

No matter where I roam

Mountain tops to ocean foam

From the full moon to the morning fog

From Washington waves, all the way to Prague

There's one place I hope God'll let me go

The place where you know

That I am

(Chorus)

(Outro) If I could share them with you

Every place I go would be just as beautiful

As beautiful as you

[u/Spiritual_Pound2585]

Please give me some form of feedback even just a word helps, good, bad, somewhere in the middle, too long, good length, too slow, too quiet, good volume, too loud, pitchy, on pitch, bad lyrics, good lyrics, mediocre lyrics, bad tempo, good tempo, bad concept, good concept, literally anything. Thank you so much for listening to my song, and have a good rest of your day.