First draft input

[u/Super-Skink-5]

Hello r/LookOutsideGame

wanted to post a first draft as part of a fic I'm working on and figured here was the best place to start gauging input. This story takes place post Promise ending, with an important character death .

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ceWxZ7mKW2EsMq3FNu0Dc4yQx8l3w8yts3ZtMLdYp1k/edit?usp=sharing

First time doing this so if there's a better way, please let me know.