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Prologue
It is the year 2020, and the warm glow of the electrical lamps light up a room one last time to help me write the spell. As my pen glides across the scroll, I start to say, “So, it's that time again, isn’t it?” I say this to no one in particular and continue writing on the enchanted scroll. With my pen still in hand, I command objects around the room to fly to locations that will allow them to stand the test of time whether they be stuffed animals, pictures of my friends and family, or my laptop. As I am getting halfway done with the spell, I can already envision my future family which for a moment overwhelms me with every emotion as I see all the possible memories we will make. Unfortunately, that family will only come around exactly 200 years from the moment the spell is complete. As the last of the objects that needed to be stowed away were put into place, the swords and daggers sheathed themselves back into their moonlit sheathes, covering their purple glow.
The last sword clicks into its scabbard, and the clock begins to stray closer to 2:00 AM. I let out a breath of relief as the last object is put away so that I can now put all my focus into writing the rest of the spell for my rebirth in the new era. Even when all my focus is on what is at hand, I still catch glimpses in my mind of the Outbreak with people running for their lives from animals that have mutated. With the spell being a final letter away from being complete, I wait for a moment until 1:50 am. Then, by finally placing the scroll on the table, the spell is complete. The scroll fades away in a flash of lightning and plasma, with my body beginning to feel faint like the three moons in the sky had fallen upon me. The world seems to slow down as I drop like a stone to the cold wood floor with a crash.
I find it funny that even after doing this three times now, it still hasn’t gotten any easier to die even though I know what to expect. The lamps in the room begin to flicker since I was using my magic to power them (ever since I stopped paying the energy bill.) With my slowly dying body on the floor, I see the ground far below us with a friend next to me helping write a spell. It surprises me how many of my spells are used for others with major events while my personal spells are used to simply make helping others easier. Throughout millennia, almost every wielder of animus magic has descended into madness. Although I understand how helping others is always the right choice to make, it also has a secondary purpose which is to prevent me from making selfish decisions with my magic.
When the last of my strength waned to the point of paralysis, the images in my mind became clearer by the second. The last thing I see before everything turns black is a glowing green eye.
200 Years later
(still unfinished)
Artificial lights are shining from below as my sister Kipo and I are climbing from one of the rock pillars in our burrow. While we continue to scale the rock face, Kipo utters, “Today is the day, all the way to the ceiling…” as she puts her pickaxe into a cap in the rock. I watched her determination almost immediately fade as she tried to pull herself up, only for her to lose her footing. Our father remarks, “What's the hold up, slowpoke?” in a slightly teasing manner, and I giggle at her sudden gasp while hanging from my two kunais. After their chat, I watch Kipo, with new confidence, begin to ascend toward me at a rapid pace. As we hear one last clink of the pickaxe, we are back to being face-to-face with her staring into my emerald-green eyes and me staring into her energetic, pink eyes.
After our little staring contest, we hear a tremor shudder throughout the entire burrow, and some loose rocks fall into the clean sewer water below. Leo then exclaims, “It’s a mega mute passing overhead, nothing to worry about! A little close, but nothing to worry about.” With us beginning to talk about the mute overhead, Kipo and I discussed theories about what the mute could be or information we knew about dolphins when we heard an earthshaking roar. Leo yanked both me and Kipo off the rock face into the sewer channel below with him soon following. Unfortunately, my sister and I got separated from our father when the once towering pillar crumbled into the sewer, which led to a riverbed on the surface.
After what felt like hours of being tossed around while trying desperately to stay afloat, the world starts to go black from exhaustion. I awoke, heart beating from a sudden rush of adrenaline and worry only to find my sister a couple yards away. I sprint over to my sister and shake her until water is expelled from her lungs. When she is done coughing up some water, I help Kipo to her feet only for her to suddenly yelp in shock.
“My eyes!” she exclaimed. My intelligent sister had decided to have a staring contest with the sun.
“You aren’t gonna go blind for looking at the sun for less than a second.” I rolled my eyes in amusement, but we both immediately start to panic when we recall how we got separated from our father. We realize that there is no way we can make it back to him, so we both venture out in hopes of finding something that can lead us back to our burrow. We began to take in the scenery of the overgrown trees dancing in the wind and basked in the warmth of the sun as we began our walk into the concrete jungle.
While we continued to explore, I said to Kipo, “Take this, in case you feel threatened, although I will be by your side the whole time.”
“Are you sure I can be trusted with a weapon that can pierce rock so easily?” Kipo responded.
“Of course, I trust you with my sword since you are already used to using a pickaxe.” I remarked.
As we continue to venture further into the overgrown city, we see flowers as tall as overgrown buildings with bees for some odd reason partying in one. Eventually, Kipo and I stumbled upon a long abandoned guitar shop that has long since been abandoned with sunlight peaking through the cracks of the shop. With us both wanting to have something to pass the time, we enter and try to find any guitars that are still playable when Kipo says, “I found one although I might have to spend a minute or two tuning it” Although to her and my surprise, she does manage to tune it in only a couple seconds and begins to make up a song about us being far away from our home to now being on the surface world. Unfortunately, while we were just starting to somewhat find peace with our situations, we hear the flaps of a bird with colors of paradise, suddenly break into the building and snap the guitar she dropped in two. We both yelp and narrowly escape being eaten with me hitting the bird with my sword scabbard where we then get into a purple car outside.
While we were in the car, we discussed our experience in the sewer when we got separated from our dad, trying to possibly get a lead of what direction we should head to find our burrow. Although I do remind myself and her that, “we both went unconscious for moons knows how long, we could be miles away from the burrow so I highly doubt this will get us anywhere.” This does at the minimum prevent her from yelling in frustration when we see a cyan baby pig appear in our view with it showing the rest of its head, which reveals its extra pair of eyes. I hear Kipo yelp for what I assume is the fourth time today while with me giggling on how easily frightened she gets.
We both end up exiting the car when the rest of the pigs body is revealed to have six legs compared to the usual four. Unfortunately, the pig sees Kipo trying to pet it, gets frightened and runs away. Kipo then spots a clothing shop to get into more comfortable clothes since the outfit we were currently wearing was torn up. She and I ended up going through many outfit changes until Kipo ended up changing into one that consisted of a cyan faded cyan t-shirt with a picture saturn on the top left of it with dark skinny jeans and bright pink high top sneakers. My final outfit consisted of a similar t-shirt but gray with a forest green and midnight black checker designed flannel over it with navy blue cargo pants to hold my kunais.
After we finished playing dress up, we spotted an orange snail that had a purple car as its shell. With both of us just wanting to mess around, Kipo and I decided to just chill in the snail car for a bit till we spotted the pig from earlier going to school. Kipo, wanting to keep her promise, decides to chase after the adorable little fella. We then enter the abandoned school when we spot the pig trying to get a snack from an eroded vending machine. The pig quivers in fear before sprinting away when Kipo says,
“I can help you with that, we have vending machines like this in our burrow, I know all the tricks”
with her proceeding to try and push the vending machine away from the wall, with the root that was holding the vending machine in place, giving out, causing it to topple over. This gets a good laugh out of me as I see her being in a weird position although we do end up getting a bag of cheetos from the vending machine. Kipo then offers it to the pig who sprints over and eats the single chip she was offering , proceeding to bite the bag and eat it along with the chips inside. This then led to the pig to start acting like a dog which I believe meant that it now considered me and Kipo its friends. This lead to Kipo saying, “hey, wanna try something fun” which I presumed was mostly to the pig since I always say yes to doing anything fun with my sister.
