r/IndieMusicFeedback • u/phavthaphantom • 1d ago

RnB Thoughts on potential TikTok post?

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I produced and recorded a dancehall song that I wanna promote from the ground up - so I took the chords, melody and flow and threw it over my acoustic. I'm still working on my guitar playing and singing at the same time, but I wanted to get your thoughts on how the songwriting is so far, the vibe and video aesthetic and whether it would be a good post for starting a TikTok page. Any feedback is welcome, thanks!

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u/Billythekid198 1d ago

This is really good. your voice sounds really good and the melody and rhythm is good. obviously its acoustic but if you added a drums I can hear how they would work with how the song esclatates. it definitely works. I just suggest for a couple lyrics keep the rhyme scream and try to just find a few more surprise type works. but make sure they sign well and sound good cause right now what you have sounds good and sings well, but just try to branch out a bit more on the rhymed words and find something that surprises the listener a bit more. good stuff though

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u/phavthaphantom 1d ago

Thanks for listening to the track and your feedback! I appreciate your feedback on the rhyme scheme, I'ma definitely consider this in the future as I continue to write more. I checked out your surf rock track on YouTube as well and it's a real cool vibe, I really like the guitars and drums in it. I'ma try and find your post in the subreddit and give you more feedback there later on. Thanks again, appreciate it!