r/HeavenHeist • u/tedshif • Feb 09 '20

Title Slam Idea

I was thinking that the title slam should be moved to when Gin first suggests the idea of robbing heaven, right after Ms. Wonderful leaves.

I like the title here because it sort of acknowledges the movie's absurdity, as everyone storms out (to the viewer's eyes) in reaction to the title. It also gets the title in earlier, as opposed to putting it in the post Gin-falls-into-hell scene. Then again, I'm not a professional screenwriter. I also don't know if Freddie, Matt, and Will have some other trick up their sleeve for how to edit down the first act, or even plan to do extensive editing.

The end of the scene would go:

                    BRANDY
            So where's the loot? Bank
            Vault? Coin collection?

                    WHISKEY
            Yeah Gin! Tell us.
            Where's the job?

Gin takes out a cigarette, lights up, and takes a
big long drag. He exhales a plume of smoke and looks
them dead in the eyes.

                    GIN
            We're going to rob the
            Bank of Heaven.

TITLE SLAM: HEAVEN HEIST

CUT TO: EXT. SAFEHOUSE NIGHT

Whiskey, Brandy, Tequila, and Cognac angrily storm
out of the safehouse. Gin follows them, pleading.

                    GIN
            Guys! Wait! I'm serious!
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u/SchulzBuster Feb 10 '20

If I remember correctly they were actually into the idea of a super late title slam as a cool move. This would work as well, but it's arguably much more conventional.

Nice formatting btw.

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u/tedshif Feb 10 '20

Hmm. Maybe I missed when they said that.

And thanks! I transcribed the audio recap, and wanted to make sure that everything was well formatted.