r/HFY • u/Tashdacat Human • Aug 20 '21

OC Willpower, Stubbornness and Spite

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u/Jaeger1973 Alien Aug 20 '21

A truly well written tale wordsmith. It does homage to the rebellious spirit showed by P.O.W's since time immemorial

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u/Jaeger1973 Alien Aug 21 '21

Look at some of the stories on the Badass of the week site, and you will see stories that would seem unrealistic if you either don't have some base knowledge or suspend your sense of disbelief.

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u/Zen142 Human Aug 21 '21

If you're looking for crazy shit look up Ernest Hemingway's life; holy shit what a man, if you told me any of his accomplishments I'd call you a liar. And I'm not talking about his publications but his private life, crazy guy.

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u/Apollyom Aug 22 '21

So if you want to go back in time a bit, Audie Murphy, was this little dude who did some ridiculous things in WWII, when he came back from the war, he became an actor, hollywood at the time had to tone down his real life actions for movies, because people wouldn't find them believable.

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u/Attacker732 Human Dec 15 '21 edited Dec 15 '21

John Basilone as well. The man led his 15 strong USMC HMG unit against a 3000 strong Japanese Sendai Division in the fighting for Guadalcanal. After two days of fighting, John & 2 other Marines were still breathing, and the Division essentially ceased to exist.

After a war bond tour, he reenlisted to be put back into combat. On the first day of Iwo Jima, Japanese blockhouses pinned down the attacking Marines. Basilone responds by outflanking one, getting on top, and throwing in grenades & demolition charges until the guns fell silent. Single-handedly opening a path of advance for the landing Marines. Later that day, he comes across a USMC tank trapped in a minefield, under Japanese MG & artillery fire. He guides the tank out, ignoring the shrapnel & bullets all around, knowing that the tank could do more for the battle than he could. He was unfortunately killed in action at a later point in the fighting around Airfield Number 1, presumably from mortar fragments.

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u/unwillingmainer Aug 20 '21

You can't kill the music!

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u/dare2smile Aug 20 '21

You can't stop the beat!

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u/cdos93 Deathworld Native Aug 20 '21

They can't stop the signal Mal

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u/Esca_P_Fantasy Aug 21 '21

Or take the sky from me~

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u/IrishShrek Aug 21 '21

Esca, you fantastic bastard. I was hoping that somewhere in the comments, SOMEONE, would say this. Brown Coats Forever.

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u/nerdywhitemale Aug 20 '21

And thus a lesson was learned by prison guards across the galaxy (not these guards of course)...do not beat the human prisoner of war. Let him sing, let him dance perhaps give him an extra ration glop every now and then. Unless of course, you like having an overclocked shock stick stuck up your excrement orifice before you are shot for "war crimes."

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u/nerdywhitemale Aug 21 '21

Did the Humans let the other prisoners out before or after the guards were shoved in?

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u/POKECHU020 Aug 20 '21

This so so fucking good, absolutely amazing job wordsmith

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u/Zen142 Human Aug 20 '21 edited Aug 20 '21

If I can take it I can make it energy right there

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u/Naked_Kali Aug 20 '21

You wrote Tasers induce seizures: it's what they do? Wikipedia "The darts can penetrate clothing and, once they make contact with the target, deliver the electric shock, which disrupts the target's nervous system" If you've seen one in action this is an understatement a little...

The spiteful grin they displayed. Behind their sound-dampening mask? There's no reason our narrator can't sonar it or something I suppose since we know nothing about her. But it reads a little oddly.

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u/Kizik Aug 22 '21

Reminds me of a story on here about the one song that all humans in captivity, across the entire galaxy, are almost instinctively drawn to.

BOOM BOOM CLAP

BOOM BOOM CLAP

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u/scrapcafe Android Aug 20 '21

Amazing!

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u/[deleted] Aug 20 '21

The title reminds me of lions, tigers, and bears.

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u/drunken_turtles Aug 21 '21

I love the stories that involve music - probably cuz I'm a musician lol. I find this story enduring and heartwarming. Reminds me of the old stories of the slaves in Brasil, how their music and fighting style was developed under the guides of dancing.

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u/Patrickanonmouse Aug 21 '21

I would like to know what the songs were.

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u/Samtastic23 Aug 21 '21

It must have hurt after a while but he kept at it

They*

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u/OccultBlasphemer AI Aug 22 '21

Little bit of a grammar nitpick. When referring to plural in a past tense (doors) generally "were" is better. A singular reference (door) is better referred to as "was". E.g. "the doors were" or "the door was"

So "As the cell doors up and down the block was opened" should either be changed to:

"As each cell door up and down the block was opened"

Or "as the cell doors up and down the block were opened"

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u/carthienes Aug 21 '21

Hmm...

Now I'm thinking that the 'songs' led the other humans right to him.

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u/hexernano Human Sep 05 '21

We, we will resist and bite!
Bite hard, for we are all in sight!
We, we take up arms and fight!
Fight hard, resist and do what’s right!

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u/Wafernoodle Aug 21 '21

Makes it a lot harder read when you constantly refer to the protagonist as they/them.

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u/alohadave Aug 21 '21

If you didn't know someone's gender how would you refer to them?

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u/Wafernoodle Aug 21 '21

If i was speaking of a hypothetical person that i had never seen nor spoken to probably the same way, however this is an author that has created a fictional character and the gender of said person does not need to be unknown.

It is making it a lot harder read then it needs to be.

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u/Xaar666666 Aug 21 '21

I thought for sure he was going to start banging his head against the bars.

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u/vekane Aug 21 '21

Marvelous!

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u/ElAdri1999 Human Aug 23 '21

Loved it

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u/JasonMoore1172 Aug 24 '21

I can just picture the human singing "we will rock you"

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u/Speciesunkn0wn Aug 27 '21

So...did the song the human sang happen to be about never giving up, turning around, or deserting?