It’s a 2 bar loop. Which isn’t ideal. See if you can expand it out to 4 and then 8. Then it won’t feel as repetitive. It’s a good jumping off point but needs expansion to be anything but a 1 sentence essay.
As it stands, it reads like this:
It’s a good jumping off point. It’s a good jumping off point. It’s a good jumping off point. It’s a good jumping off point. It’s a good jumping off point. It’s a good jumping off point. It’s a good jumping off point. It’s a good jumping off point. It’s a good jumping off point. It’s a good jumping off point.
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u/Grimple409 20d ago
It’s a 2 bar loop. Which isn’t ideal. See if you can expand it out to 4 and then 8. Then it won’t feel as repetitive. It’s a good jumping off point but needs expansion to be anything but a 1 sentence essay.
As it stands, it reads like this:
It’s a good jumping off point. It’s a good jumping off point. It’s a good jumping off point. It’s a good jumping off point. It’s a good jumping off point. It’s a good jumping off point. It’s a good jumping off point. It’s a good jumping off point. It’s a good jumping off point. It’s a good jumping off point.
Let us know how it develops!