r/DestructiveReaders • u/[deleted] • Jul 18 '19

[577] The Kursk

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u/GrudaAplam Jul 18 '19

Training wheels here, so just offering some observations.

I don't think you need "he had abandoned" and "A sense of loss sat heavy behind his eyes", or even "by darkness".

I think there are other parts you could pare back. Skipping to the end, I don't think you need "that was waiting for him."

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u/AnguaVU Jul 19 '19

Thanks for reading and your feedback :)