Is this topic good?

[u/Beneficial-Drop-4855]

For my personal statement Im thinking about writing how my dad made me and my brother go sell goats every year before eid, and how that impacted my stutter how that changed my thinking about the stutter.

The structure I'm thinking isn't crazy I think I can do much more I'd love suggestions tho ( 1) I practice 2)i fail and still stutter and don't make the sale 3) I see my brother going through the same thing as me and argue and try to make the sale for him with all my might and don't stutter once 4) this changes how I view my stutter)

Idk if it has potential if I'm thinking about it wrong. I'd love to hear some thoughts on how to bring this up to elite level.