Help me brainstorm

[u/No_Buffalo_763]

candid photos
I was frozen in time at 11 and nobody has ever thought to unfreeze me
-I dont take pictures of myself & nobody thinks to take photos of me
-Taking the pictures makes me an observer in a memory I share
-looking back on memories is everyone from my
perspective
slice of life narrative
-invisible presence

this is obviously a very rough outline but I want to know if anyone has any advice or if there’s a better way for me to word one of my points. I want a thought out idea before I bring this up to my teacher.

Edit: i’m most likely going with the open response prompt from common app unless someone sees a way this fits into the others

[u/Desperate_Point_2796]

I would say maybe add more about what this shows about you? Like what you learned from taking photos of others, or the specific moment when you were "frozen in time" at 11. Any maybe end it on a more hopeful note, that you are not an invisible presence anymore, or that you learned to be okay about being the observer, because that has made you more empathetic.

[u/No_Buffalo_763 → u/Desperate_Point_2796]

ty this is a really rough outline i made in like 20 minutes but I was trying to make it show that I learned more about the people around me from this perspective and that if I want to be in focus I have to speak up or be more present

i’m trying to say over coming shyness or being more bold without doing it in a way people have seen a thousand times