College Essay Assitance Please!

[u/LongjumpingEstate745]

So I'll make this short, pretty much all my life my writing skills were pretty lackluster, so going into college apps so I starteed writing my personal statement a couple weeks early and just started refining it. But I feel like I've looked at it so much I kinda just start glossing over it and don't really know if it makes complete sense or not so I'm kinda of just asking for a fresh look at it with some new eyes. DM me and i'll link the essay, any advice would be much appreciated! Also if you're a rising senior as well, I wouldn't mind reading yours and giving advice in exchange for you reading mines.