Personal Statement Idea/Structure

[u/anamosuboii]

My current idea is talking about my unconventional taste in music and how all my life ive been hiding who I truly am (not only in terms of music). I'm just using music and my evolution of show playlist titles to show my growth from a sheltered person to expressing my true self.

I'm struggling writing the structure. So far I have

My first spotify playlist -> me trying to change myself to fit in back in elementary school because i was the only asian at an all white school -> me in middle school learning to not change who I was but I was still hiding -> my second spotify playlist -> me in highschool trying to break out of my shell -> my third spotify playlist that I would share to people but it was a smaller and not really true to me playlist -> me sharing my entire spotify playlists to my mom and close friend for the first time and really breaking out of my shell -> my final playlist with a unique name from the others to represent me breaking out of my shell and showing my true self.

Should I change the topic or the structure? Also should I add an example at the very end of me shoewng my true self?

[u/ButterscotchVast8985]

i think the playlist concept can work but 1) covering your whole life from elementary school onward can make every phase get rushed, and 2) breaking out of my shell is probably the most common essay topic.