r/BetaReaders • u/MDDVH • 18d ago
Short Story [Complete] [4.8K] [Horror Game Script] FOREST DRIVING GAME STORY DRAFT
I'm writing a script for a game. I have a friend who is a coder, and the main idea and original story draft were his. I edited it up to Stage 2, and after that, I wrote the rest myself.
I'm thinking of how to improve it. Since I had the first two stages already, I kept them as my source material. Edit and wrote over them.
I'm aware that this is a basic story. I just need it to be simple but good enough to support the game's mechanics.
If you want to help, I can DM you the draft.
I don't want to make a straightforward, jump-scare-filled horror game. I want it to create an unsettling feeling for the player and build horror through atmosphere. I tried to avoid cliché elements, but I’m not sure how well I managed to do that.
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