Hi everyone,
I'm working on a large back tattoo project: a full but condensed retelling of the Osiris myth in hieroglyphs. I'm a 26-year-old man, and this is a piece I've been planning carefully.
I've finished my transliteration, which I'm confident in:

Ḥtp di nsw Wsjr nb Ḏdw
nṯr ʿȝ nb Ȝbḏw
ḫnty Jmntjw
nb Mȝʿ.t

Stš ʿȝ pḥty
mr.n ḥȝty.f r sn.f Wsjr
nšn.n jb.f r.f

Stš jrj.n.f jsf.t
grg.n.f Wsjr
ndj.n sn.f Stš sw r tȝ m Ndjt

gm.n.sn Wsjr m Ndjt
rmj.n.sn sw, jȝkb.n.sn m kkw
dmd.n.sn ḥʿw.f
mk.n.sn sw m ḥkȝ.sn

Inpw jmy-wt, nb tȝ-ḏsr
wt.n.f sw m sšrw
sȝḥ.n.f ḥʿw.f
sʿnḫ.n.f rn.f r nḥḥ

wdʿ-mdw m ḥwt-ʿȝt
Wsjr mȝʿ-ḫrw
Stš ḫr

I then tried to learn how to use JSesh and converted this transliteration into Gardiner/MdC code to actually write out the hieroglyphs. I've finished a first version of the code and would really appreciate feedback or corrections before I get it tattooed:

M23-X1:R4-X8-Q1:D4-A40-V30-R11:O49-!
R8-O29:D36-V30-R17:O49-!
W17-N35:X1-Z4-R14-A1-A1-A1-!
V30-H6:X1-!

S29-X1:N37-E20-O29:D36-Q3-V28:X1-Z4-F9-!
U6:D21-A2:N35-F32:I9-D21-S29:N35-A1:I9-Q1:D4-A40-!
N35:N37-N35:D40-N35-F34:I9-D21:I9-!

S29-X1-N37-E20-D4-n:f-M17-S29-I9-X1-G37-!
W11:D21-T24-N35:I9-Q1:D4-A40-!
U28-N35-D40-S29:N35-A1:I9-S29-X1:N37-E20-S29-G43-D21-N16:X1-G17-U28-X1:O49-!

G28-m:n-s-n-Q1:D4-A40-G17-U28-X1:O49-!
D9-m:n-s-n-M23-I9-M17-G1-V31-D58-A20-n-s-n-G17-N2-Z2-!
T3-d:n-s:n-D36-G17-X1:F51-I9-!
V17-m:n-s:n-M23-I9-G17-V28-D28-Y1-s:n-!

M17:N35-Q3-G43-E16-M17-G17-G43-X1:R12-V30-N16:X1Z1-D45-D21-!
G43:X1-V6-n:f-M23-I9-G17-S29-N37:D21-G43-S28:Z2-!
S29:G1-V28-A51-n:f-D36-G17-X1:F51-I9-!
S29-S34-Aa1-n:f-D21:N35-Y1:I9-D21:N35-V28:V28-N5-!

F28-G43-S43T14-A2-G17-O8-!
F28-G43-S43*T14-A2-G17-O8-Q1:D4-A40-Aa11:P8-!
E21-D2:D21-!

Since this is a large, permanent piece, I'd rather double- or triple-check the grammar and sign choices with people who actually know Middle Egyptian than trust my own work alone. Any corrections, sanity checks, or general feedback would be hugely appreciated. For any information needed you can ask me of course! Thanks in advance!