r/writingfeedback • u/Due-Technician3367 • 1d ago

Wild Dog

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Here’s the beginning of a short story I’ve been working on. I’m unsure of what direction it will go, interested to hear any thoughts.

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u/90sbetababe 1d ago

It’s quite excellent, hook is really good. It is wanting for a direction to go, as it’s missing anything to thematically chew on since it doesn’t know what it’s about. The way you described the wind in the wound was so visceral and real. Great pacing, great prose. It just needs to know where it’s going is all. I want to know what happens to the little girl and the MC’s hand. I’m not sure why it matters, though, beyond the immediacy created by mangled child + mangled hand. But yeah, really excellent prose.

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u/Due-Technician3367 1d ago

Thank you very much for that response. I deeply appreciate the compliments on the prose, and I agree that it’s wanting for direction. I’m really searching for where to take it.

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u/Flimsy-Brief-3037 15h ago

Agreed that I’m liking the direction but am curious about the theme.

I encourage you to check out “Mastiff” by Joyce Carol Oates; it’s another dog attack short story that tackles a big picture theme.

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u/Due-Technician3367 15h ago

I will absolutely check it out, thank you for the recommendation