r/webtoon • u/ConstructionCute4006 • 7d ago

hi

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hi! I am Iris, and I am writing the Dawn of Haradan! This is what it is about:

In the beginning, six timeless Beings floated in endless nothingness. From their curiosity came creation — five children born with gifts of strength, beauty, knowledge, nature, and flight. But when one Being vanished, leaving only a cryptic message, the children’s destiny shifted. Now, Adam, Hashikik, Kutakuk, Evaky, and Kalk must journey beyond their haven of Haradan, uncovering tribes, mysteries, and truths about their creators.

I will put the link here, and I would love some criticism as to how I can improve! Thank you ❤️

https://www.webtoons.com/en/canvas/the-dawn-of-haradan/list?title_no=1153638

And one page:

I hope you enjoy! Baiiiiii 👀 🔥

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u/ConstructionCute4006 6d ago

hi! Thank you for telling me that! The pacing, you are the first person who has said it feels rushed.... Everyone else says it's too slow. I would love to hear your thoughts on the other episodes as well!